This is my "i love you"

by Landi Cordier   Dec 18, 2006


Once upon a fairytale time
a little blue-eyed, blond-haired girl
fell in love with a boy like you

days came
and nights gone swiftly by,
lovers came,
idiots went away,
still the love for the little boy like you stayed

through a winter as long as a year
through a blistering summer that I struggled to endure
my love for the little boy did not go away

you see Gerhard, this i my "i love you"

I know it's short
and I hope it's sweet
but you're the love I could not beat.

*plz comment/vote*

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I thought this was sweet.
    I enjoyed the imagery again, but I still thought that the flow was shaky in places.
    Keep working on that, and you'll make your work heaps better.
    xx

  • 17 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Well.. the flow was horrible.. as was the depth. The emotion was alright.. and I had to make myself read it. Cheers.

  • 17 years ago

    by steve

    Endeavoring love, great topic and you pulled it off flawlessly, i agree with kristens comment and i see you made the changes, the flow was fantastc