EXCELLENT. so beautiful. Your emotions were seen ever so clearly. Your viewpoint of the Poem was practically yelling to me. The title. WOW. it left me at Ponder. At the beggining. I started to interpret. but failed. Till the end. It all made sense!! The title was the PERFECT MATCH for this poem. Beautiful. Excellent work. Voted 5/5

I think these

When everything rolls on my shoulder.
He lets it go and it's all over.

and the last two lines are my favorites. It's a very sweet poem. I like it overall!
Charisma*

This is such a beautiful poem. I truely enjoyed reading this. The love pours from your words. Excellent job!

Aww this is so sweet!! its a great poem! great job.

Excellent poem, but a few typos.

Kisses me when the night starts to dim.- TOO
Too see it without him by my side.- TO
The last prayer to rise my wing.- im pretty sure you want RAISE

otherwise its a pretty poem. 5/5

Great Job. I loved it. The flow and structure were both good. Although I felt you used the word, "He" way too much to start lines. Other than that great Job!

Peace, Joe

Great poem homie!

i relly liked the end where you said he would be the last thing u see

aww how sweet !

5/5 !!!

This poem is excellent so filled with love and emotion. it's so very true that the one we love gives us all these things and more excellent job 5/5

At the end, the rhymes just kinda fell apart, but i absolutely loved the beginning. It was great. I only wish we all could have that!