Comments : The One You Forgot

  • 14 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    This was a well written poem. there was something in that that everyone can relate to at one point or another. great work darling.

    -/2 Terra

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    This is a heartfelt poem pouring with emotion. Great job! 5/5.

  • 14 years ago

    by heather

    When i read ur poems i enjoy them so much i wanna read them all! ahh! ive gotta get off this computer and do some things but i keep jus reading them! lol

  • 14 years ago

    by Lyndsay Kalyta

    "Youre everything in life to me
    the reason why i want to breathe"

    This is just brillant, fell in love with these lines, you're good!

  • 14 years ago

    by Gem

    The flow on this one was excellent, i think everyone has felt this way once or twice.

    "It's just the way life sometimes goes
    You can't escape all its blows."

    I'd just an 'of' after all to clear it up a bit. But it's just a suggestion, it works fine without it.

    I loved the wording you used on this one, simple words convey a strong message
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 14 years ago

    by lost in lovee

    I loved this poem!!!! i could really relate to it!!!!!! u really showed good emotions! 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Krzysztof J

    I dont know what to say.. Im speachless.. from the start i was like wow this is simply perfect.. this poem is amazingly perfect... 99/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Bridget

    Hey thank you sooo much for entering this poem in my contest!! i really enjoyed reading it, i think it is such a powerful love poem. I like how it has good flow, and how it rhymes.. i love poems that rhyme :).. I think it was a very strong ending, especially because of how you repeated that line you used at the start. So i rate this poem 5/5.. well done xox

  • 14 years ago

    by heather

    I really Njoyed this poem. well written!!!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Wow!! great poem......heartfelt...i can relate...good job!

  • 14 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    5/5. Amazing poem. Yeah school wouldnt let me do love poems but im at home now. I really liked how you had written this poem!! I enjoyed it. I kind of have a poem thats kinda like this it's called Played Heart. But idk. My poems arent very good. Great job on this one.

  • 14 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    COMMENT # 4

    another really good one.. some stanzas better than others flow wise. but word choice is wonderful.. once again.. :D and i LOVE how you repeated part of the first stanza at the end..

  • Another great poem. I really enjoy your poems. Keep it up 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Wow great job =D again u amaze me =)

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by lost and lonely nevermore

    Loved it and i so get what it means 5/5 "smiles"

  • 14 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Comment #3:

    Man, Charisma! You are such a talented writer. I mean your work is professional and completely heartfelt. I can only hope to become a writer like you one day. Such amazing, tear-jerking work. Amazing job!
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 14 years ago

    by just me

    It's beautiful, truely. Once again I can relate. I dont want my ex to ever forget me because i know i won't ever forget him. There's a quote that goes, "I must have been stupid to think that lil old me could rock your effin world" I hope i rocked his enough that he wont forget me. lol.
    I love this.
    <3
    L.C

    <<<Did i ever tell u ur simply amazing?>>>

  • 14 years ago

    by oksana

    I really like this poem its really good !!! cheak mine out some time and commet them thanx!
    <3

  • 14 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Love this piece, absolutely love it. I think that the repetition of the lines:

    "But I'm shaking at the very thought
    Of being the one you forgot."

    really helped, these lines really stood out to me and helped pull me in that much more, great job.

    5.5
    :]

  • 14 years ago

    by Becca

    5/5! I liked this. I can relate.