Hey, i promised u i was going to comment u and vote on your poems and here it is, i like this poem 1 out of 1 :) ttyl

Wow. i love this poem. it's so wonderfully put together and the words just seem to flow lovely together. amazing job! 5/5

I really liked this.
Because some parts rhymed and some didn't, I was kind of thrown in places, but apart from that I think you guys did a wonderful job with this.

What a heartfelt write. Beautiful collaboration. I especially loved the ending even though it was sad. Great job!

^ I agree with becca, except for the "Now how it is ripped apart" bit. I think that totally makes since in the poem.

A good collaboration :). You've explored emotion in immense depth, therefore creating a grasping atmosphere for the reader. However, the structure could be improved: if you want to keep the rhyme consistent, try extending the length of your stanzas, this does in effect, aid in how the poem is interpreted by the reader. Nevertheless, a heartfelt and intriguing piece with applied poetic techniques and extended vocabulary. Well done. To the both of you :).xx

What a good read, i have always been a fan of Gorans work, but him + you make somthing even better. i am very impressed. and would like to maybe do a collab with you or him.. PM me if you are interested.
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Tom

As minutes turn into hours
And Hours turn to days
My heart keeps on beating
For the one I truly love

these are my favorite lines..i can relate....no matter how many people sorround you and no matter how much you try to fit in, still there is a missing part that cannot be repaired..

YOUR A GREAT WRITER I LOVE READING YOUR POEMS , THIS ONE IS ANOTHER GOOD ONE I REALLY LOVED THE FIRST AND SECOND STANZA THEY PULLED ME IN GREAT WRITE..5/5

Sooooooooooo sweet & adorable... 5/5 keep writing...

This poem paints a sad picture of a broken heart. I agree with Becca as far as critique. With a couple tweaood one.ks, this could be a g