I honestly thought that was great. You created a beautiful piece on a blank canvas, and filled it with such vivid descriptions. You described the girl in this poem so well, that I pictured some one with great complexion yet flawed within. Reminded me of those who deceive others using their outer beauty (such as models), but we all know better. Anyway, that was great!

I really like the flow of this poem, and doing this only cause you had to, i apploud. This poem seemed so soft but yet full of complicated answers most would not understand, keep writing!

While reading this poem I kept in mind that you wanted criticism and maybe help with what you did wrong, but honestly this poem was perfect. There were no flaws in my eyes and the imagery and flow was awesome excellent job 5/5

All of the words you used highlighted how good this poem is. so many adjectives. ice blue eyes.

so very perfect. very well done. i gave you a 5. it was def excellent.

David

Well this is certainly different. i actually think it's a very clever way of expressing your idea, so well done.

however, i have to agree that sometimes your lines seem forced. you've got a really nice personal style, but you're losing the intention in the fact you want it to rhyme.

you also have a problem with syllables in this line
"Gliding stride so full and long,
Such like a gracious love song."
it doesn't follow the pattern you've set. you need to add another one somewhere in it.

all in all, you've done a great job. you just need a few tweeks here and there really. nice.
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I was a little off by the rythem .. but i read it over a few times and got it ... this poem is really good and i love the feeling that it gave me ... i read it hopeing u will read 3 of mine but i also enjoyed it and was glad i clicked on your post

Oh i like this. very good! 5/5

Well it kinda threw me off on the first 2 lines of the 3rd stanza, but it is very good samantha, i love the last stanza,

"Underneath those ice blue eyes,
She has herself completely disguised.
Far from perfect is she yet,
As she creates her dark silhouette."

it is very catchy, i see no real flaws, so perfect write, i give it a 5/5!!! keep up the good poems!!!

This poem left me wanting to understand this imperfect angel. I especially was fond of the second stanza for some reason. I couldn't really detect whether or not the tone was sad, though. Thats pretty cool.

Mmm, let me see.
I'm gonna be honest, as always....

THAT WAS AWESOME!

Yeah, I really liked it. It flowed well throughout, I liked the words you used, the last stanza really finished the poem off really well.

You have talent
well done
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Wow i really like it kinda confused me at first but all in all it was great 5/5

I enjoyed this poem quite alot. It got me thinking of how someone could look as beautiful as an angel, yet inside their hearts are pure ice. Is that what you were trying to interpret? =D And I thought see and fully rhymed just fine, hon.

I am going to be honest, I hope thats ok. I like the poem very much, but I don't think the line

Is too complete for a respond.

really works well here..I can't read it without tripping over that sentence. it feels like it is off.. too complete for a response..too complete to respond..
I love where you are going with it though, I feel like other than that, it is very well written, very good expression.. looking forward to reading mor

Wonderful, fantastic, + brilliant(sp?), all words to describe this poem.
Your choice of wording was flat-out amazing and the emotions were portrayed very well. Another thing, the imagery was so vivid, I was picturing everything in my mind.

"Underneath those ice blue eyes,
She has herself completely disguised.
Far from perfect is she yet,
As she creates her dark silhouette."

^^ Wonderful job ending the poem at whole. Overall, fantastic job hun! Keep it up! 5/5

Stephanie.

Lol, yeah i got the fully part right : )

honestly? i thought it was quite a good poem. the second stanza was incredible, great flow, well written, beautiful wording. the other stanzas were ok, not as good but still ok.

the first stanza didn't really do it for me and as the start of the poem is the most important so as to attract the readers attention i felt that wasn't so great. if i gave u 4/5 would taht be downvoting? it's a good vote on my scales coz i rarely give 5's and 4 is given to poems i honestly do love but felt it didn't do u justice. ur obviously a very VERY talented writer and could probably make a lot of money some day from that, and this poem wasn't as good as i can see u are from other various poems of urs i've read.

still, it was briliant poem. i really loved it. fantastic work.
-Suz xxx

Lol. As I was reading the poem, the flow just came to me. We had to do the same thing for my English class last year. The emotion was very well written into the poem, as was the heart. Nicely done with this one. =). 4.6/5

I thought this was a very good poem. I liked the second stanza especially as I thought the phrase 'cotton white' was an interesting phrase to use as cotton sort of relates to delicate as well. This poem also seemed to flow very well and I was very impressed by it. Well done. Sarah xx

This poem was very good. I liked how you put in a lot of emotion into it. And, you wrote this for english? I doubt you got less than a 100 [:

Loved it!!! simply wonderful!! mysterious and makes a person want to know more! 5/5 keep the great work hun!

I really like i mean a real lot lol
5/5 love always linda*****