This was just... wow.
You had some very powerful wording in this hun..
It had a great flow to it as well which kept it going
5/5
*Gem*

Wow this poem is very intense, I was reading it with the dumbest look on my face im sure lol. I was so intrigued and wanted to read more and more.

The handle starts to turn
This is when it starts
The bruises he will give me
Are his form of art

To me that was amazing, the last line especially. The sad thing is this poem is all to real for some children. Amazing job and perfect flow 5/5

Hey
your poem is amazing, and i know your going to get that alot,
but you deserve a lot of credit for it.
to me it seemed so real, and it was very intriguing.
although i hope this is not happening to you? if you ever want to talk you can email me(gasoline.rain.bows@hotmail.com)
again, great job.
take care

My favourite of yours!
Totally loved everything about this, particularly the imagery you used in it.
I was impressed with this stanza
''The handle starts to turn
This is when it starts
The bruises he will give me
Are his form of art''

Now I'm jealous ahahaha
xx

This poem really gave me the chills. Its so sad, and dark and i hope this isnt happening to you. Abuse is something that is really wronge and poems about it really seem to hit me hard, all of this kindof things are happening. The imagery, was excellent, like i said before it really gave me chills. The flow was good, and it was a great read. Keep it up! xx

This is my favorite poem of yours, it's like... wow!!!! this was like really intense, it's sad though... great job!!! 5/5
*Shawte*

Great job on your poem. You have told a story that will help someone someday. Excellent writing.

I hope this is your fiction. Sadly I know somewhere it is someone's reality. Sick people in this world. Nice job for this type of poem.

This poem made me shudder. I truely hope this is just a story and not a true one. If it is.. I'm so sorry. You did an amazing job at description and your rhyming was simply amazing, you did a great job at this.

I think on this you should say wake instead of awake:

A chill down my spine
My hands start to shake
I hope this is a nightmare
From which I will awake

Amazing Job Babe!

5/5

Excellent! Wow! I liked the deep emotions, imagery and flow! Wow! You did an excellent job! I found this completely flawless!
5/5

Wow! this is really good. you are a great writer...im adding you to my favorite's list.

This is so sad ... every line has me on my toes waitingto read the next one good job

This poem is haunting and amazing. you're a great poet!

~jas~

Omg. That was so sad!! It brought tears to my eyes. :/ I really liked it though. It flowed very well & it just.. had so much emotion in it.. And tons of great imagery.. Intense, rather. Just.. ahh. UH-MAZE-ING! :]

Pluss. I loved the wording.. The vocab was excellent.

Keep it up, Babe!

Bri. x

Aw this is so sad. I am VERY VERY VERY sorry if this is based on actual events that have or are happening to you. If they did know that you never deserved them, and if they didn't then you captured the feeling wonderfully. I think the only way that you could have made it better was to use a few metaphores instead of just stating what was happening. Nice work though.

My life can realate to this

My life can realate to this

Great write. from the beginning i was unsure what it was about, but as i read further, I enjoyed it more. the words you used were amazing. keep up the great work [:

Wonderful, just like all of your poetry. I love it all, you are very talented, keep up the amazing work.

Peace, Joe

WOW!!! i LOVE it!! its so intense and it has a GREAT flow! WOW! lol 5/5 without a doubt