The title reminded me of that famous poem ..."and when you see only one pair of footprints, that's when I carried you." That's my favourite love poem.
Ok so...the flow was nicely done and it was truly a sweet and romantic write. You did describe a romantic scene, and the ending was very sweet.
One line I disliked though was the second of the second stanza. It just seemed you were thinking of pet names to fill a line and give an easy rhyme, it didn't sound good to me, sorry.
This poem is cute, it isn't indepth or about a new topic, but it fits its purpose (to be sweet).
Thanks for sharing.
p.s. I've already commented on your other poem, so it was a good idea to leave two titles :)
Aww.. this is soo cute.. definitly my favorite so far.. im more or a love poems not dark poems person cause im quick to tears lol.. anyways.. this poem is ADORABLE!! simple words but still the poem turned out wonderful.. the flow was flawless and the rhymes were great.. the whole idea was a little cliche... but you expressed it beautifully DEFINITLY MY FAVORITE! :D
WOW! This is so amazing. For a long time i have been trying to utter words like this about my boyfriend and I but it was still so hard for me, and you've broke it down so beautifully. I love the thought...'Footprints in the sand' Especially since the beach is my favorite place. I could imagine this peaceful scene in my head. It was very sweet and welcoming. Keep up your wonderful work!
Keep your poem I like my poem this way no one is going to change that cause this poem was based on my life and I like it the way it was thanks but no thanks. you basically said that my life wasn't perfect and I need to be fixed.but it's okay bye
I LOVED this.
The first stanza had me completely hooked and I didn't want the poem to end, but when it did I wasn't disappointed.
The imagery used in this is breathtaking and I thought the flow was flawless.
I think this was just beautiful, and I don't feel anything needs to be altered, it is perfect as it is.
Leaving footprints in the mud,
Honey, baby, you're my stud.
^Just pointing out stud seemed a little forced in my opinion. Other than that nothing else seem to caught my eye for something wrong. Everything else seemed perfect. I really enjoyed this poem. The whole footprints thing is waht I really loved. Keep up the great work. God bless 5/5
Very touching and beautifully written, with a lot of emotions within. You created great atmosphere through the poem.
My favorite stanza is:
-Leaving footprints through the years,
When other footprints disappear.
Gazing at the lovely stars,
Knowing this life is always ours.-