Wow, love this poem, your utopia, i love the way you described and expressed the perfect world, i also love the imagery in this, well done!!!!

Narc xxx

I thought this was really well written, and the imagery was astounding.
You did a truly wonderful job on this!

I loved it!!!! My favourite lines where
' I would dazzle ordinary mortals
With my silver gleaming wings'
I WISH I COULD FLY!!!!

Remember not to have any ' in your poems. casue then other characters come on, and it wrecks the flow of writing.

but apart from that little hick up this poem was really good to read and see wat you have to say.

David 5/5

I loved this poem! The images that were created in my mind were just superb! Wonderful use of vocabulary! [I really have to stop sounding like an english teacher in comments.]

5/5

Awesome poem ! 5/5

This poem is great.
Love your word choice.
5/5
take care

~Chelsea

Remember to edit this and take out the '. it makes it hard to read otherwise. the flow is interupted. but well done anyway! keep writing plz.

5/5 david