Awoke

by Jacob   Jan 22, 2007


I woke up in a dream today
And somehow my heart seemed to say
That this was the land
Where the damned were sent to decay

For as far as the eye could see
There were thousands of souls
Reaching and screaming for me

And amidst this ocean of commotion
There arose a darkly dressed figure
Whose pale complexion
Stirred up dreaded emotions

And his voice rang out
Without having to shout
Then it was in my head
And it coldly said

It seems you've wandered
Off the beaten path my friend
For you've reached the land without end
The realm of condemned

~I'm not really finished with this one yet. I'm just kind of stuck right here and don't know what to do with it.~

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  • 17 years ago

    by Godofpain

    Hey, its pretty good so far, has a good story to it.
    Yeah I hate when you get stuck on parts and you have to go back and change things and ugh....

  • 17 years ago

    by Corinne

    You've got a good start so far. Just write and see where it takes you

  • 17 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    Wow... I like it so far, can't wait to see how you finish it. good luck.