by Colby Jan 22, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
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I sat there for awhile |
by lala
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Wow. That was a great poem. It told a sad story that I could relate to and yet enjoyed reading. Good work! 5/5 |
by Skyfire
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I can totally relate to the ending....one person really can make a difference. Don't you wish more of the world realized that? |
by Bridget
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Omg this poem is sooo pwerful!! i love it! its so sad though and gosh wow its awsome! a couple of suggestions though... "They older man pointed to me" - i think they is supposed to be the?.. and ... "as he lay there propped up there in the bed".. i suggest that you only use one there in that sentence.. other than that this poem is perfect!! great job 5/5 |
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I love this. this was absolutely wonderful. I feel that way sometimes. Heartwrenching at times, or maybe thats just me. Anyway. keep it up. You're good. |
by Perfection
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Sutch a sad story... very well written I enjoyed it very mutch. KEEP IT UP =) |