Comments : Underneath her skin

  • 14 years ago

    by Erika Lamorie

    That was well written... reminds me of my poem "Lonely Girl".. Good Job!

  • 14 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

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    nice poem cutie...
    I OWE YOU MY LIFE!!!
    ahaha lol

  • 14 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    You soo radical.. DUUDDEEE!!! hehe :)

    sorry im not listening to you because im too busy typing your comment

    GOSH IM LISTENING!!

    kay so yeah i like your poem

    ... two that i know of... of something that has some signifigance to me...

    see im listening!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    AMAZING JOB!! i love this poem

    HAPPY

  • 14 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    NO MORE COMMENTS FOR YOU!! poopie!!!

    ahaha lOLLOLOLOLLOL

  • 14 years ago

    by angelina

    Omg this is really good ... the last stanza was the best it really meant a lot to me and this poem caught my attention and kept it ... thank you for such wonderful work

    *monkey lol ... you can comment any 3 poems of mine ... any ones that intrist you

  • 14 years ago

    by Sandra D

    *monkey!!... hehehe... lol*

    this poem is amaing!!! i love the words you used, and i like how it rhymed! i actually can really relate to this, im so glad you wrote it!! great job!!
    5/5... nothing less!

    Forever*Yours

  • 14 years ago

    by ShootingStar179

    Very nice.

    I love how you get to thinking that the girl is your friend or something...then you figure out that you're talking about yourself. It was very well written and I can definately relate.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jenni

    This poem was very well written, and everything sounded wonderful. the ending made me sad because it reminded me of myself. great poem, keep writing. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Allisha Fox

    I feel that way sometimes. Its a really good poem.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Ooo Ooo Eee Eee! i'm a crazy monkey!

    (lol)

    i had a poem with the same title. o.o

    To be totally honest i do not believe this poem should be a 5.
    the rhyming was forced and offbeat at many points. it didn't flow smoothly, and the rhyming was not adult. happy and see. they don't rhyme the way you put them. it has potential though, don't get me wrong. but it wasn';t written as well as it could have been,

    xzLaurenz

  • 14 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    This one is amazing... i love it, there are so many girls out there that just put on a fake smile. it tells alot. 10*5

  • 14 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I'll start with my honesty, although that ending is a twist and a good one too, it's been used too many times. As I got to the next to final stanza I was predicting the ending, and I was unfortunatly right, sorry.
    What was good though, was the use of emotion in this. Reading it I could feel every word, it actually made me feel a little bit down (and I'm normally a happy person lol).
    It could maybe do with a few more creative words to spice it up a little, try a thesaurus, it's a great tool.
    The flow was constant and enabled me to read fluently and let me really get into the poem.
    Thanks for sharing.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jenni

    I still enjoyed this poem after reading it a second time. You did a wonderful job at leading the audience on to figure out who this girl was. 5/5