Wow. there is so much power behind this poem. i could feel that the character was very hurt by her best friend and i can relate. wonderful job. 5/5

It was a really good poem. Though some parts didn't flow as well as others, but like I said it's still a really good poem. 5/5

marcella

Eh.. the flow is very hard to find... but its a sad poem so i hate to be mean.. the emotion was there but it wasnt jumping out at me.. but nice job over all

I think we can all relate in how someone close to us always seems to drift away and lose thought of the fact that you were the only one trully there for them! love it!

That's the problem with teenage girls, we care about everything too much, and honestly what is the point, there's nothing you can do about the inevitable.
The careles girl idea, was quite original, however that was about it.
Everyone's written about screaming almost silently, feeling worthless and drowning in tears; I was hoping for something new.
Overall, an ok poem, good base idea, would just like to see more new descriptions.

Aww. sad story, i liked it alot. well done

much love and many kisses,
bex

Very nice!
keep up the great work, you write very nice, and we can see where you're coming from...

I can totally relate to your poem, because something of the sort happened to me a little while ago. It's so full of emotion, so full of hurt. It was a very well written poem. The words you chose were excellent! Great write 5/5! And thank your for the comment on my poem!
Much Love,
<3 Danielle

Aww. this poem is so sad. i don't know what to say...
i don't mean to sound picky or anything, but i'm just giving advice---in the first stanza you used loud twice, find a synonym that's even stronger, or two to replace both of them

Wow. Nicely done. It explained EXACTLY how I feel from my friends sometimes, but I usually just ignore the ones that I don't think are worth my time lol. Anyways, I really liked this poem and the emotion you put into it, you're a very interesting writer my Dear.

"Think of this when your best friends leave you behind,
The one you left drowning in the tears,
I was the one who always cared,
You will not even remember me,
I was never the careless girl you wanted me to be."

^^ Loved that stanza.

5/5 (:

WOW that was very goo, sad, lots of emotional feelings , but a great write, wonderfully written and word choice was nice , good job, keep it up ,your friend Tracy d,,,,,5/5

Good poem, so powerful and emotional. Beautifully written. Keep writing!!!!

^^5/5^^