Yea its a gd start to a poem it contains alot of feeling i like it
ben xxx

So far so good, you should finish it.
I could sense your words and their meaning. Keep up the prose and remember to be one with your poem. If it is real you’ll be able to feel it breath and its heart to beat. A poem is a fragment of time, a sliver of emotion trapped in our hearts and set free upon the page. Where it can finally sore and fly with other poems or cry and weep with other broken hearts. Poetry is nothing more than emotion set in motion. Poetry is seldom more than the small fossil that waits within the stone begging for someone to chip it free, and then to wonder how it came to be.

Keep up your good works. May your poems be a great frame for your emotion’s. May there be peace and love in your life. And may the mark you make upon those hearts around you be filled with joyous fragments of your own heart.

I love this poem! great flow! plz comment on mine :)

I think its a good start i liked it alot if u put the rest of it on there it will be great!!!!!

Beauty can die...as all things can....

This poem is lovely i love it its great. Keep up the good work.5/5.
~Shareeda

So far its well written and awesome keep up the awesome work

Not bad werent as gd as others tho 4/5

This is a great piece. It stands well as is, but if you add more it may enhance the beauty and flow you've already captured here. You have an original voice/wording in this piece. I love the ending.
Peace, Poetry & Power,
Gary Jurechka