Pretty dang good! Your flow was amazing, and your rhyming was also. You chose very good words. Not to big of words but enough that it was understood better. You did a great job on this. I liked this part the best:

So she continues on her way
And doing what she does
Cause people will do anything
To feel secure and loved

Excellent poem

5/5

Cause everyone wants to be wanted
We all want to be loved
[[Nicely said]]

This is beautiful. I think it's cliche, but I loved it so much because I can relate so well. Thank you so much for sharing this poem. Definately a 5.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

I am very impressed. Quite a poem. A lot of depth.Your flow, rhyme scheme, and cadence are all perfect. I see no flaw in those

This was an amazing poem! love the flow... and the use of words as well... i could feel the pain she is feeling... the emotions... you really got the talent... keep it up!

Another perfectly written poem becca, thats why your on my favs list, love this poem, the only thing i could see is that you didnt capitalize the title, but its another 5/5!!! keep writing, you have true talent!!!!

OMG! I absolutley loved this. It was so sad.

& Yet, so true for a lot of girls.
Which is the sad part. It made me cry..

I could picture a lot of the things.. and it just had so much emotion & feeling in it.

Amazing write, Hun.

Keep it up.

Bri x

"So she continues on her way
And doing what she does
Cause people will do anything
To feel secure and loved"

this last verse was amazing!! the whole thing was amazing, but i specially liked the last verse. such a sad situation for a girl to go thru, to not have any self respect is one of the most horrible feelings in the world.
much love and many kisses,
bex

Wow..this sorta shocked me..its not bad or anything i promise...i think tht some ppl can relate to this..idk who...but yea this is another good write..im jsut wondering on who is this is bout.

"She vomits up her feelings
To keep her slim physique"
^ I loved how you used the word feelings in that, I think without that word it would have been extremely cliche. Lol. But you did a great job on making it your own. :D

"So she continues on her way
And doing what she does
Cause people will do anything
To feel secure and loved "
^ I loved that stanza as well. It's quite amazing, and is extremely true.

This poem reminds me of that song Drugs Or Jesus by .. I think it's Tim Mcgraw.
This poem is sad, but it's true. It's what people do, and it's how people act. Especially girls. And, I think that it's wrong, but sometimes you have to do what you have to do. You did a great job of putting this into words.

I hope this isn't about you, you seem like a girl who has more self respect, and can accept yourself for who you are.

Keep up the good work, hun.
<3 Teria.