by lala
That was such a beautiful poem! |
by Krzysztof J
Lol NOT bad for writers block , its verygood so far finish it and let me know :)) 5/5 |
"You know its true, that no matter what I do, |
by Cattiebrie
I love the description, so many poems are lacking imagery. fantastic "illuminating goodbyes" some is really vivid, while a few are a bit cliche. |
by Edward D Zurovec
Great poem of a yearning young heart. I found it a very enjoyable read ,although in the second line |
Aww. i like this poem. very good job. =] |
by debbylyn
Very romantic......I like it Bryan. It has a nice flow and rhyme pattern. Keep writing! Enjoy your work.... |
by aDORKable x3
Aww Byran, what a great poem! Man, even with writer's block you're still really good. I know what you are going through...I spend a lot of time wishing that people were mine... but there's a way to try and make that happen: ask them. lol Idk if that helps at all, but me personally, I'm sick of waiting around if there's something I could do to make my life a little better. Also, try being spontaneous, like if you really like this girl and you know that she's not dating anyone, go up and kiss her. You might think I'm crazy, but sometimes things like that work! |
Very nicely written. The flow as well as the structure was great. Your wording was outstanding, keep up the great work. |
Okay .. to be completely honest.. this poem is GREAT :D .. the emotion is spectacular.. some of the words are simple and the imagery is dry.. however... some words are wonderful and very descriptive..& the flow is nice.. super write! |
by Liz
"With the face of an angel, pretty eyes that shine, |
by Tricky Daze
So touching and good,especially those |
by N J Thornton
Writers block poems are never the best because we force them.... |
by Cindy
Bryan |
I think this was a very sweet poem..and even with the writters block it turned out pretty nice...umm, there was one verse i didnt like "You know its true, that no matter what I do, |
by Jenni
I thought this was such a great poem. the flow was magnificant and i loved every single part of it. Your descriptions painted such vivid pictures in my mind! great job! 5/5 |
by ~Amy~
If this is not your best then you're best must be amazing! i like how you used multi-sylabol words. It gave it a lot of flavor and even though i had to read it slow to get it all in, i thought is very VERY well written! keep up the great work!!! |
by Fredy
It has, what the french call: i don't know what, great poem. |
by Cindy
Bryan |
by Milo
I loved it, it seems these are the words i wanted to express, but obviously you are a better poet than i am lol |