I need held with this one i am going to send in to Jacks Platoon but i want it to be perfect. thank you

Your paicng was pushed with badge and acknowledge but other than that it had good pacing and i liked the war and corps rhyme alot. a good poem with a clear message. most people bash the war and those who fight in it but a brave few stand behind them

your servant:
david

Well this one wasn't as good as your other ones. The rhyming was forced in it and it threw the flow off. But the poem it's self and what it was about was good! 5/5

~Kristina

Aww this was cool! keep it up bub

much love and many kisses,
bex

The world is so cold
To hold it alone
I am too bold
I turn to face this world of stone

i don't think this has as good flow as your others but this is my favorite part! it is still a very good poem,
luv gabriella

The world is so cold
To hold it alone
I am too bold
I turn to face this world of stone

what a interesting thing that i liked the same part of poem,i was really amazed when i saw,anyway the flow and wording is really great

This was my favorite part...

"I walk to the street
Watching out for my band of brothers
This is not an easy feat
Fighting for others"

It flowed really nice. 5/5

marcella

The very short lines made it seem a bit jagged, but the point you are making is a good one. Those who serve the public with their very lives deserve our admiration, not scorn.

There is fear within
Held captive and cold
I face the world with a grin
Someone had to be bold

my favorite stanza and i feel you i got 2 cuzins in the marines