I felt that you had a strong flow, and since it is free verse, you usually want to think that your poems aren't as good, when really, they are just as good, or even better.

I really liked your descriptions, and the whole, "drip, drip, drip" of water thing gave it a strong effect.

great job overall. 5/5

It's dark, pitch back

^^ I think 'back' is suppose to be 'black'

The ground is gelid and damp

^^ I don't think gelid is a word.

It really didn't make much sense. There wasn't really a point to it. And the flow is off a little bit. Other then that it was good.

Maybeee it's just the fact that I compulsively analyze all pieces of literature, but this seems to me like you had a love, and then lost it. you were with someone, where'd he go? your love has gone. the entire poem could be related to love lost...and you had great imagery to go with it.

not exactly my kind of poem, but because it's really easy to connect to, you get 5/5.

Tripp

The rhythm was like whao. i could feel the anxiety this person mustve felt. you couldve ended it better. make a deep meaning with the eagle. maybe you already have adn im too stupid to tell.

Wow, a very different style. I give you kudos for experimenting with different styles or making a different kind of rhythm - it's refreshing to see something new, and to see someone trying to play up poetry to something 'modern'. I liked it, sort of 'story telling' poetry. It has progression, and I liked the rhythm of each stanza. 'Cept, I don't like the exclaimation marks. I'm one to hate those in poetry just because I feel like it makes the poem loose the eerie essence it is intended to have, and when you put exclaimation marks in there, I feel a 'cheesy' vibe. But I love it, I love the speaker questioning themself. Great Job!

I like the fact that's it's unique and I love the use of the word gelid lol. I love seeing words you don't see every day. It makes for a much more compelling piece. though I wish you would have used more words like it. Overall I liked the stroy it told and you told it well. Good read! 5/5

marcella

This poem's alright.

I really enojoyed reading this, i've never really read one quite like it. i loved the 'drip drip drip'. the imagery was great, i could see the whole scenario in my head,

great writing.

Ally. x

I enjoyed this it is very good beautifully written