Tears Are The Waterfall (edited)

by Mousie   Feb 21, 2007


Tears are the waterfall
Down her swift cheek bones,
The cliffs of her soul
Carved by the sadness she's known.

Clouds rumble in
In their monotonous tone,
The gray color of despair
Battling the storm on her own.

Trees snap in half
Breakdown is near,
Crippled by the erosion
Of her innermost fears.

Far in the distance
Birds flutter in peace,
Soon they'll be gone
And the happiness will cease.

ehh just not feeling the best the past couple of days, needed to write a sad poem, things aren't going great this week, neither were they as much last week. oh well, it'll get better at some point, always does! until then, enjoy the sadness

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  • 17 years ago

    by David

    And i did. the sadness was evident thru out this poem. the whole way thru. well done. hope your life did get better.

    5/5 David

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Another good one. Although this is and will always be a cliche subject (sadness and crying) it could pass as something not so cliche.
    I think it's your original diction and perspective of it that makes it that.
    In your notes I admire your silver lining.
    In the second line of thr second stanza, the word monotonous is great, but having tone after it seems repetitive. Monotone means single tone, so in fact you said "single tone tone," if you know what I mean.
    Not bad at all though.

  • 17 years ago

    by SomeRomanticGuy

    Great poem babe I love all the imagery you can actually picture the poem.

    =D

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