The Season of my Discontent

God, Tim....I've been living this for the past 7 or 8 months.
You've written this with such perfection.
I love this part:

"words haphazardly written
erased before the ink was dry"

Brilliantly written as always....Holly

Oh, oh, oh! what is that line from? "The season of my discontent." it's bugging me now, please tell me.

Anyway, I rather ilked this poem. The language was simple, the situation nowhere near uncommon, and yet it was put together in a way that didn't make it seem unoriginal. I think captured the issue very well!

I really liked the line "erased before the ink was dry," but then I thought... how do you erase ink? haha. maybe "scratched out" would ease my mind more than "erased," but, you know, it's your poem.

I also really liked the lines "write hard or die trying/the tagline for today." That's just so appropriate, isn't it?

Finally, I enjoyed the reference that you threw in to a mysterious, once-known woman, and yet the poem is not about her. it adds another possible dimension, but doesn't take over the poem.

Anyway. You just said in the discussions somewhere "leave me a comment any day," and I thought... "well, why not?" Have a good day!

Page after page lined the walls
crumpled pieces of a mind gone mad
^^^
Oh Lordy , after I read these 2 lines I just knew this was about to be one amazing read. And I was absolutely correct.
Wonderful to see you writing again. I was just thinking of you the other day, wondering when I would have the pleasure of reading another of your poetic beauties.

I have also been wondering if you are still in a club and if not I would love to have you join R.T.V.W.
You would be a wonderfully talented addition to the family. The door is always open if you so chose to join
Take care
Luanne

"hiding behind false pretenses
where hand and mind once combined
now lies a futile attempt to explain"

Well said, my friend. A true inspiration with longing and discontentment.

Well done. Great write.
Jeannie

Thats fantastic, such a deep piece of work, truely touching in every way.