Drifting with the breeze

by Rahl The Layman Lord   Feb 23, 2007


Love in a bottle
Hair long and pure
Glistening with the radiance of the sun
Silence
The world in infinite time
Lost, alone, confused
Looking on...fields
Endless, brown
Seemingly dead with the dust of ages
All plain
Save the maiden in the haze of distance
White silky dress drifting in the light breeze
Swaying with the grass of the fields before her
Wrapping, conforming around such long gentle legs
Figure, waves against the dawn sky
Orange glow, emanating from such a fair figure
Chin lifted
Eyes bright from across the expanse
Blue gleam shining back
Digging into my soul
Look of questioning
Asking, begging, wanting
Silent tears for what she sees so far away
Pulling, pulling
Asking why I am not there
Why I have left her on her own
Why I have abandoned her
Why I will not give her what it is she desires
Asking when I will come
When I will hold her tight against me
When I will protect her from the world that has hurt her
When I will give her her desire

Tears...
Seeing a goddess so far away
A goddess so fully wanting what she sees
Why can I not give her that which she sees
That which she wants
Why cant I giver her me...

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  • 17 years ago

    by Daz Mellow

    Love it! Great job. Bravo. Kudos. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    Omgds i love your style..such variety and authenticity...you bring such refreshing pieces to the bored...your a really good writer and i really enjoy reading and commenting your work..NEVER STOP WRITING.

    melissa

  • 17 years ago

    by Destiny Marie Babyy

    Awww Jas its adorable and very well writen i really liked it. i think u r right bout words having meaning. very good

  • 17 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Ok Jason, now I have read this poem a third time. I hate to admit it, but my eyes started to water this time. That might be because I just wrote a love poem and I'm now listening to the song, "Closing Time." Haha, or it might be because times have been so hard lately. Either way, your poem knocked my emotions over the edge, so it can't be as bad as originally said. Not that I ever said it was bad. Actually, I said it was good. Anyway, nice write. Excellent structure, best if read very slowly :) Imagery, as usual, was wonderful. 5/5 from me.

    Love
    lane

  • 17 years ago

    by Laura

    I love it!!!!!! It made me shed a tear or two! Its so amazing!

    Laura 5/5