I really like this one.. meh. I'm imagining everything. Kudos. <33

God, I loved that. :]
It made me cry.. Don't tell anyone though.
Amazing job babe.
Loved it.
5/5

Wow bro!!!!!!!!!!!! That was AMAZING!!!
the imagry was very kewl.....*speechless*
my favorite part was towards the end i love the ending its a great poem!
keep em coming!

Hey u actually created a story(captivated) or sort of but nice imagry (who wants u)lol i kid but well done

Awwwwwww!!!!!!! I luv this poem!! its so awsomers =D it just me go to an aww its one of your best yet!!

I love it!!!!!! It made me shed a tear or two! Its so amazing!

Laura 5/5

Ok Jason, now I have read this poem a third time. I hate to admit it, but my eyes started to water this time. That might be because I just wrote a love poem and I'm now listening to the song, "Closing Time." Haha, or it might be because times have been so hard lately. Either way, your poem knocked my emotions over the edge, so it can't be as bad as originally said. Not that I ever said it was bad. Actually, I said it was good. Anyway, nice write. Excellent structure, best if read very slowly :) Imagery, as usual, was wonderful. 5/5 from me.

Love
lane

Awww Jas its adorable and very well writen i really liked it. i think u r right bout words having meaning. very good

Omgds i love your style..such variety and authenticity...you bring such refreshing pieces to the bored...your a really good writer and i really enjoy reading and commenting your work..NEVER STOP WRITING.

melissa

Love it! Great job. Bravo. Kudos. :)