I NEED HELP FINISHING AND NAMING THIS POEM :)

by rebecca   Feb 25, 2007


Ive kind of started this but i wanna make some changes and don't know who to end it !
anyone got any ideas :) ?

When I was younger
I wanted to be a princess
A handsome prince to hold my hand
The latest Barbie
The doll house beside my bed
When I was little
Growing up scared me
It was a big world by yourself
And I had never realized
How much one person could help
When I was small
I had lots of friends
But none that stuck beside me
Through thick and thin
Then I learned what I best friend was
There for you anytime
They'll be right beside you
Holding you when you cry
They know you better then you no yourself
And they're always there to try and help
When I was younger Cinderella was a dream
And Mickey Mouse made me scream

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  • 18 years ago

    by Erika

    I think that this poem is of to a good start, but i think that you are trying to put too many emotions into one poem. in my opinion, i think that if you want to write a bood poem then you need to focus on one emotion at a time. if you want to write a second one then do so. for example, go wiht the emothin and the thought about relating this to cinderella and other childhood characters and how being in a good friendship makes you feel that way again. i hope that i helped some... good ideas just a little jumbled.

    Erika

    XoXoXXo

    (comment back if you want to talk)

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