I really like this poem and the imagery the words created, I could just picture everything as I read. "The dark clouds break and the rain begins to fall" That was the perfect way to end this poem. great job 5/5

Wow. its beautiful. deep..imargery is strong...I LOVE IT. a big 5/5.

Very very nice metaphor. I like this a lot. Usually I don't go for freeverse, but I'll make an exception ;)

Now for details:

"Everyone feels it,
But not everyone knows it,"

^Feels too repetitive. "It" is always a tricky word to use in poetry. Try to use the storm instead of it.

"The smile that fades to anxiety for only a brief moment"

^ Seems redundant. I know it's not. Lol. But, it just seems out there. It doesn't fit.

"We notice the look in your eye"

^^Who is the "we" being referred to? Be careful not to use too many pronouns, as that will confuse the reader. Don't worry, I have trouble with that too.

Overall, try not to use "you" and "it" as much. It takes away from your talent.