Wow I loved this poem.. I really liked the title too. The flow was good. I liked the rhyme scheme in it; it was alittle different, which is always good.

"taking all of a familey and kin"
familey needs to be family

"breaking familey's apart"
familey's is families

This was very good! Keep up the great work!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Jason,
I love this poem to i can relate to it i think thats why i like it so much it is written well keep up the good work

This is an outstanding poem! I love the fact that it's saying how the simplest lie can do so much damage. Another great piece of work, Jason!

Whoa. i voted. def 5. this poem was dark. very. loved it, somehow. mysteriously.

5/5 David

Hauntingly beautiful dude, especially the last stanza, i swear i could almost feel the wind blowing while i was reading this. very nice, definate 5/5

...Ooo, like how it has 'whispers in the wind' on both the first lines and the final line. It wasn't exactly something I like but I enjoyed it nonetheless. There is a part in the second stanza where the rhyming seems forced. A slight flow prob on the last stanza but can be overlooked. It's different which is a good thing.
~Faith-less