Comments : Promises [Acrostic]

  • 16 years ago

    by firexdancer

    I can relate, your poem shows so much emotion, you can really see it. it's gorgeous
    luv gabriella

  • 16 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    This one grabbed my attention although it is really short, i loved this and i think another poem based off this one longer and more detail would be great to.

  • 16 years ago

    by lost in lovee

    Ohh i like dit soo much! short, but filled with so many emotions! 5/5 good write!

  • 16 years ago

    by Darien

    Ouch Breezy! That one was like a dagger! Very well written Acrostic! Each letter was sharp and painful. You made your emotions known in this poem. Every line was amazingly written, and it's so hard to pick a favourite. Gah! This is just amazing and I love it! So deep, so painful! I know when you write poetry, it usually has a hint of personal conflicts in it, and I hope that this one isn't too serious. I haven't talked to you in a long time, so I don't know what's going on. So I shall use your poetry to catch up on your life!

  • 16 years ago

    by amoxi

    This poem was very emotinal breakup can be very hard and getting through them is always rough good poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Awww this was great! nice big descriptive words! great job I loved it

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    When i read this, i really thought i might cry... its like you are reading right into my heart and writing it down on paper. this is an amazing poem i love it

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Satisfied; [I bet you are]

    i love that line.
    Perfect ending

    Beautiful short poem, a little forced but that is something that you rarely can help in an acrostic. You did a well job and i totally LOVE the last line... just... awesome..

    10/5 (5/1 on the last line!)

    ~Stephen White

  • 16 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Good use of the form. Most people make the mistake of trying to rhyme acrostics, and when you have the starting letter restriction already, it only makes it harder on yourself to add another restriction.
    I think on the first line "ripped and torn" is a pleonasm. You only need to use one of those words, in which case you may want to substitute a word there.
    I liked your use of language (other than that) and the sarcastic
    ending line was potent, giving the reader a strong sense of emotion to end the poem with.
    Thanks for sharing.

  • God, it was only a week or even days ago I felt that same way. Glad I'm out of that! Anyway, wonderful poem, I was definately about to relate to it. Keep up the great writing! ;)