Comments : If I die tonight

  • 17 years ago

    by Lucifer

    Wow this is great, the emotion in this show's so well and grabs the reader
    5/5
    keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Wow, this one was really sad. This is the sort of message I would leave someone if that were to happen to me. It's something I don't like to think about. Good job on this poem, really meaningful.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    I liked this poem it was creative and it had a nice rhymthm to it the only thing I'd work on is more creative words maybe use an online dictionary for synonyms otherwise nice poem 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    It's something I don't like to think about but you got this one here, great write,
    \nessa/

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    This poem also has a lot of emotion. it made me think that this poem was written about me, because thats how i feel half the time

  • 17 years ago

    by Mo

    Gabriella Gabriella Gabriella - I cannot believe you are 13 years old and writing like this - you are amazing!! If I think back to when I was your age - I was writing about boys and love vs lust and stuff like that - not deep brilliant masterpieces like this. Keep it up. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Wow another good poem...i can feel ur emotion all over..very good =)

  • 17 years ago

    by honeypot

    You write about things that I think about, and i'm sure everyone who reads your work can take something from it.
    Your fantastic, stay strong sweetheart xx

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I really liked this. The rhyming was spot on. An incredibly bleak image was created, yet I enjoyed reading it a lot. Your words really brought me into the poem, as if I was there.

    Good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by AllHailTheHeartbreaker

    Strong piece. Definitely a 5/5. You're a lovely writer, keep it up!

    [tragic]

  • 17 years ago

    by Kayla

    Another wonderful poem Gab! This one definitely grabbed my attention and I just couldn't stop reading it. I can relate to it in so many ways.. this is actually the way I feel most of the time. Great job girl, keep up the good work!! <3

    ~Loveless Nights~