Angels Whisper

by Cherish   Mar 15, 2007


I walk through an unknown land
My feet so bare I can feel the sand
Is it the breeze? Thats making that sound?
Or is it angels whispering all around?
I can feel the wind blow through my hair,
I can feel the angels watching stare.
They can see deep into my eyes
they can seek out all my hopes and lies.
They whisper as I was on past
So I speed my pace till I'm running fast.
I see the edge of the cliff ahead,
but instead of stopping, I fulfill the dread.
As I jump of the cliff
I feel myself fall,
but just as I loose all hope,
I hear an angel call.
Then suddenly I stop falling, and I look to see why.
Theres angels all around, stopping me before I die.
I feel godlike hands grab my arms and legs,
I'm rising to the sky, the angels whisper all around and I relieve a happy cry!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Breeeezie

    Wow this is great!

  • 16 years ago

    by Trevor

    Oh, and if you want to contact me, e-mail me @ sugar_high0803@yahoo.com

  • 16 years ago

    by Trevor

    Preety good... but its not very poetic... i changed it a bit so its more poetic and has the same general meaning

    I walk the unknown land
    My feet so bare I feel the sand
    It's in the breeze, that awful sound
    Or is it angels all around?
    I feel the wind blow through my hair
    I feel the angels watching stare
    They see deep into my (blue) eyes
    They seek out all my hopes and lies
    They whisper as i walk on past
    I speed my pace, I'm running fast
    I see the cliffedge just ahead
    But i don't stop, i fill with dread
    I jump the cliff
    I start to fall
    I lose all hope
    And then a call
    I stop falling, you ask why?
    The angels here wont let me die
    They hold on dear to arms and legs
    And then i'm rising to the sky
    The angels whipers can be heard
    As i realese a joyful cry

    Sorry if i'm a little.. Critisizing? rude? but i read this and then this poped into my head.. i thought id let you know, just so i wouldn't be accused of plagerism or whatever if i posted this

  • 17 years ago

    by Daz Mellow

    Wow! This is really good. Good pace and good words. I kind of pitured it too. hehehe kudos!

  • 17 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    Whoa. So did they really want to die?
    I liked it. 'twas a really good read.

    Happy writing-

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