Through your eyes

Nice job! i like how ur simple words gets to me =D

Ok theres some typing errors.. And i have to point them out.. cause it bugs me lol...

The look that i see have become so different,
have should be HAS

why can't you come and pretend it alright
it would be better as it's

i have **to** much to say --to should be too

your arms and together **we're** lay-- and i think we're should be we'll

If i offended you by this please don't be... IT's just i know some times poems and quotes when you go into edit changes the words.. and maybe it did that... Either way I'm jsut trying to help...

Besides all that is a great poem!
Ash

This is realy good. i wish i had thought of a poem like this to express wuts going on between me and chris. 5/5

A good poem, could i suggest you capitalize the start of lines.
I liked the flow and imagery, you have talent. Your poems are very sweet and romantic.
my love, Tara-Kay
x

Great work, t was nicely penned, i like it a lot. it got the message across, my fave lines
The look that i see have become so different,
the way you and me talk is not the same,
you seem to be so far and so distant,
you don't seem to care when i call your name.