Comments : Nobody knows

  • 17 years ago

    by Static

    Very nice... I see u have had a go at what i was talking about with trying not to use 4 line stanzas. Uve done a great job i love the last few lines. Hits nicely.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is a great poem David. GREAT POEM. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Wonderful Poem! I enjoyed it very much. I loved your imagination and emotion you put into the poem. Your flow was awesome, and your rhyming was too. It all went together so smoothly. I really like this part:

    The meaning so hidden though
    Like the meaning of life
    The question nobody knows
    Yet isnt it love and loss
    We live with it right under our nose
    Love is our friend, and loss is our foe
    Who will win, nobody knows...

    Wonderul poem!

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This is so beautiful, it's so sweet, 5/5 forevor (again) you write such amazing poems, wow.
    gabriella

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Great job on your poem. I really enjoyed reading this piece.

    Yet the love so real and clear
    Its feeling is electric
    When you say the words I want to hear,
    The wonder and the spark
    It ignites my once cold heart

    Loved this stanza.
    5/5
    Take care Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    Wow! Great poem.. the flow was awesome and the way you said things was just... beautiful. The rythmn was sweet. And I get this sense of a meaning behind the poem, but it isn't blarinigly obvious. Amazing write, even better read. Great job 5/5
    Much Love,
    .:Danielle:.

  • 17 years ago

    by Randomness

    WOrds jump out. Leaving me amazed. It describes everything needed. The flow was awsome. not one thing needed to be changed. you have a pure and true gift right there.

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    Wow, I really like this poem a lot. Especially the last bit. You have a great writing style! <3

    5/5!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Wow great words David! I loved the flow and the meaning behind this poem. My favorite part was definitly the ending.
    Love is our friend, and loss is our foe
    Who will win, nobody knows...
    I mean wow who comes up with something like that!?
    I give it a 5/5 great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Hebe

    Just beautifil!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessie

    I would have to agree, the flow was a little bit off but it didn't mess with the meaning. I really liked it. If you want a place to really let some emotions out or submit your poetry, or maybe even make some friends come check Azurerain.com/forum out. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Jamie Lorraine

    Your poems are truly amazing they soar right through my heart

  • 17 years ago

    by Curry

    This is really good.i love it!