This is a good poem. well done, its a good talent you are showing so keep it up. hope you are ok. take kare xxxxx

Very moving. I like the flow and the emotions that lay both on and under the surface. Good Job 5/5

I like this poem alot... great job!

"Even sun shining above me"
^ You should add 'the' after Even.
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"Fades as dropping from the sky"
^That doesn't really make sense. :/ I get what you're saying though.
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"begins again"
^ Both of those words rhyme with the above word, therefore you should change the word 'begins' or take out the word 'again'.
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I loved this poem, it was a great write. And, I'm soo sorry for you loss, hun. I hope you're doing okay. <3 I really like this poem, and as I was reading I was like.. I wonder if she's talking about an ex or something, you know. Because, it was like.. that kinda poem. But, you weren't. The story behind it, I guess gives it so much more meaning than what readers think before they read it all.
This is a great poem, and the fact that it came from deep within makes it even greater than anyone can imagine, except you.

I loved it.
Keep it up. <3
5/5

Good work!! very good poem.. Hope you are doing ok though.. 5/5

I feel you walking away. = I see you walking away.

Awesome job, Nice words. You have a few lowercase I's that could use fixing, but other than that it is flawless. Good job.

5/5
~Stephen White

Another good poem.
I'm sorry for your lose.

'Everything is black
Even sun shining above me
Fades as dropping from the sky'

Loved it ^^

Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]

I loved this, again you did an excellent job. i am soo sorry for your loss. You have alot of talent, and I think as long as you keep expressing yourself though written words that you will get though it. Keep writting, and stay strong. 5/5

Oh my gosh!!....such a beautiful poem...sooo touching!!....there r few mistakes though which r pointed out in the earlier comments though...but the poem is all the same...Beautiful!
Great wrk!5/5!
xxPoojaxx

I really like the opening line! I was really touch by this great poem! well writen! the flow was smooth! and sorry for your loss :(

It put a vivid picture in my mind. The Description of the sun..I love that XD

The imagery was there, and it was strong and i thought it was very powerful

Ah now that is sad. the words you used need to be more desriptive tho. but still this was good.

5/5 David

Aww that is soo sad. Sorry for the
loss. Very good and short poem.
Well done God bless 5/5
<3Tay(^_^)

A beautiful poem, sorry to hear about your friend. =( I have had many losses myself. It isn't an easy thing to go through.

The flow of your poem wasn't the greatest, but it was powerful.

I apologize if I'm being too harsh, I honestly don't mean to be, I just know that I want honesty, so I will only give honesty.

Anyhow, you are very talanted, and you have great potential, so continue writing and posting. =)

4/5
~Ally~

Wonderful poem.. filled with emotion.. the flow was good but a little off in the beging.. great job :D

This is a great poem! Such a heartfelt poem. Loved it. 5/5

Nice poem

This is great. Must be well written by you!!!

This is so touching and moving, the little note at the end nearly made me cry and gave the whole piece another meaning, awesome, heartbreaking stuff...
5/5
- ali xxxxxxx