Really sad poem but you did a GREAT job. Very well written. Your a good writer. Keep up the good work!!
5/5
take care!

~Chelsea

OoOoO...I loved the words in this poem you did an exceelent job with that... I liked the message of this poem because I feel a lot of teens or even adults including myself feel this way once and awhile so nice job!

Oh my goodness, i love this poem!! i like how you made it rhyme and it flowed really well. this really got me, i know exactly what you're writing about. i've felt it, and sometimes, i still do. im so sorry you feel this way, but im glad you could write about it. you're a very talented writer!
5/5

This poem wasnt ur best like ur rhymes werent good in some spot, me and me, crawl and control, and cry and y, also try and shorten ur lines up a little it will make it sound better, other than that it was pretty good

What a great dark poem. i love these the most. and this one just fueled my hunger for them. your description was differnt but refreshing!

5/5 David

I really liked this one. i understand how this feels. it was a little shaky on the flow, but the desriptions u portrayed allowed u to pull it off. goodjob 5/5

I think this was okay, but it wasn't fantastic. It's a very over-done theme, and some of the rhymes seemed a little bit forced.

If this poem is true, them I'm sorry. And I hope things are better for you soon. I am liking how you manage to easily convey your feelings through a poem.

As always, a pleasure to read.

Helloooooooooo.
This poem had alot of deep emotions in it, which was good.
"I see them looking at me, feeling that they are fake
I feel that I'm always being used, and real friends were something I couldn't make
I feel like everyone intends to pretend
they mean nothing, they always hurting me, they ain't real friends"

That verse didn't flow as steady as the others. My opinion would be too shorting it in bits. But twas still good.

I think we could all relate to your poem at some point in our lifes so that made it good alsoooo.

The rhyme scheme wasn't constant which made it a bit akward to read.
Some places rhymes & some didnt.
I'd say stick to ryhming or no rhyme.

Good work =)

Wow..i think tht this would b better in sad but it does well in here too so its sort of in the middle..i can relate to this in a sense....especially the friends part...this poem is really good u hav talent...

I loved this one it is one of the best ones of your I have read so far. You did an excellent job 5/5