Servant

Thank you anonymous

This is really sad. it is great. i won't say anything technical like brigitte, cuz i don't know. i don't pay attention to that. all i saw was an amazing poem with meaning.

Uummm. that is quite a good a poem! Keep it up

Amazing word usuage, that captured the reader. I wasn't possitive what your rhyme skeam was though, in the first paragraph nothing rhymed, in the second paragraph it was an ABCB rhyme, and in the last nothing was rhymed. It kind of through the flow pattern off. In this sentance "He refuses me to freedom" I'd make it "of freedom" A well done peice of work, your unique discriptive sentances made the whole thing pull together. Nice job.

Wow!
are you talking about yourself? because this poem is really sad!!!
i LOVE it though!
well done!