I really liked this! it was a little long, but it was worth it!

the beginning was so good, such emotion! it's like i could feel the feelings that were put into it...and the ending was ok. i think it would have been a better sad poem if you let it end sad, but none the less, it was a great poem!

keep up the great work! I'll keep reading and commenting!
[would you mind doing the same? thanks]

Take care!

That was really awesome! keep on writing grrl!!;) thanx for the comment

I'm OK and I'll be fine
I'll never let myself cross that line
those are my fave 2 lines in an amazing poem, i loved how you captured, fear consusion and pain in such a different life i also loved how instead of the end people would expect the poem was turned around to show strength and the revalation that you don't have to give up. this was an amazing pice of work however i think mybe you should review this part
'nothing seems right
nothing seems OK
it's like a lights to bright
and i throw my hand up to shield it away'
its a good enough stanza but maybe you could word it a little differently? but yea all in all loved it i gave it 5/5

It was something ive nvr read before.
i like to wait a bit before responding to comments, just to find the perfect time to check in on ur work. and im glad i chose now.

that was a great poem. rough around the edges, but u captured confusion, sadness, and hope all in one.

its generally hard to put sadness in there and then hope, w/o it sounding cheesy, but u did it well.

ur a great writer, keep it up. wut a creative concept.
love ya lots,
sore

Interesting poem, and a good read. loved the ending, such strength xx

I absolutely love it!
you did an awesome job on this!
new perspective on falling in love and i really liked it!

WOW that was a marvelous poem , very good, started out great and gotta little weak, but you got it together and finished it off nicely , wonderful write , great job,,, thanks for sharing ,, your friend Tracy d.....................5/5

Very beautiful work. I am totally in love with this poem. you're amazing