Long yet liked ;) 5/5

I gave it a four/five.
Not because it wasn't good.
But because there's too many pauses.
Your wordings are perfect, though.
It's actually a story.

I honestly enjoyed reading this!

HOLY SNAP!!!!! that was freaking long! i didnt really understand the wording right away but then i got into it... i liked it 5/5

p.s. your a hottie!

This is so so so so sad! But the saddest part is these sort of things really do happen... The emotion was very well conveyed, great job!

Understood it on the first round. The pauses allow the words to sink in yet personally they annoyed me. Of course if there weren't pasues the effectiveness wouldn't be as great as it was. I admit the ending was brilliant. The images were intense. Nice concept.
~Faith-less

At first i was intrigued by the title...so i read....but the unique style wich u have used is well.....captivating...
the pauses were well placed and all in all deserves a 5/5....
great work,
true story? if not...one amazing imagination uve got there =)

Have you ever been the target? i have. i am.
--musiclives23

This was pure genius, excellent potrayal of feelings and thoughts. I love the fact that you put a much needed spin on the typical bully poem, the twist of being a concerned but frightened spectator and not the victim in itself separates you from the herd. I also agree that the pauses were well-placed throughout the poem to heighten the feeling and it made it that much more wonderful> The story sucked me from the beginning, title and all. 5/5 only because there is nothing higher and I am soo puttin gthis on my favs. peace leader man

This is really cool. echoing what other have said. feel like I've read it before.

WOW this is really good, and oh so true, it makes you think about how hard it really is to help others... i love the ending it was really unexpected, very very good... 5/5

I haven't commented anything in a while, so for the lack of real words, I'm sorry...

This piece is wonderful. The spacing is very well thought out and the sheer emotion in it just brings the reader to their knees. I think everyone has probably been on this side, regardless of if you've been bullied or not. We all went through second grade, didn't we?

I realize that
I should
help,
but I know that
I won't.

^^ Those few lines made me as a reader feel horribley guilty. Helped along with my headache. Because it reminds me of the thousands of times i've seen it and it's still there...and i dind't do anything, despite how badly i wanted to..

I, myself, am
scared,
-- Scared of the ridicule of others...
-- Scared to bear the burden that you...
you had no choice to or not to bear...

^^ I remember that feeling too. the feeling of being immobile simply because the fear is paralyzing. nobody wants to be the target. And as humans...we choose self-preservation, i think, over giving ourselves for others. Very very few people can stand up and say No. I love those few short lines and just how much they expressed within them.

So I
just watch

^^ I forgot to breathe. Just...amazing two lines. The spacing was perfect because I can picture somebody whispering it..this strikes me as a whispered poem..because it's so very very shameful.

Anyway, lovely piece. One of the best Ive read in a while. :)

5/5