Wonderful write, the flow and structure was great. Keep up the excellent writes.

This line, "For the girl, to me means the whole world." should be, "For the girl, that means the whole world to me."

Peace, Joe

Ok so its poems like this that make me wish my BF could write......uhg 5.5 to you. I loved reading it :)

Beautifully written. Your poems about love are amazing. Never read anything like them. Well done ~mel 5/5

Hello
hmm, Fear of rejection, something every human beings fear. i whole heartly agree with you there goran. i loved the start of the poem because you start with this captive image, of this girl taking over your sleep, but one thing i would suggest to change in order to make it more effective and kind of personal, which i am sure is not what u want, but i would suggest that insted of saying the heart y not use my heart, because when you say "the heart" its not so effective and touchin as using "my heart" it's as though you are talking about something that is not part of you, which you would want to deny at any rate. but afterall it was a great heartfelt poem, indeed any girl would fall inlove with you in a mint, if only you would this magic of urse over them.lool.
take care
looking forward to more great poem by favorite poet of all time.

Beautiful! this is one of the best love poems i have ever read! the flow was GREAT! 5/5

You have done it again. I can think back to the many times I have had that fear that you have expressed in your own style

The love in this poem was excellent. so much. the wording was amazing, but the part i liked the best was the ending. well done!

5/5 always, david

This is alright...the flow is a little off... i think
*if she reject me
should be
*if she were to reject me or if she reject's me
I like the idea behind the poem...you've done better
Jonda Beth

This poem is very nice and loving in many ways.

In the second stanze line four reads:
"For the girl, to me means the whole world."

It would be easier if there was a comma after the word me.

Overall you did a wonderful job.

--Sher

Again you really know how to write a beautiful love poem.

5/5 again from me. David

This does flow perfectly, it's so gorgeous, and such a sweet love poem 5/5
gabriella

+For the girl, who means the world to me.

Other than ^^ this was an amazing poem.
Many people can relate to it, I believe.

Keep it up.

Ah. The good old rejection questions that everyone goes over in their head. I hate that speech, it sure does confuse. But, you did a great job of writing it down, I just say it out loud, but it's like my thoughts were put out in front of me to read, but yet...they were unique because they were from someone elses point of view. I loved this! Lol. Anyways, before I babble again...

5/5 (:

Everyone fears rejection.....nicely written....

That is the fear of the heart,
Talking to my words every night.
Will she accept me for who I am?
Giving the hopes some light.

5/5 Good job. Debbie

Aww so beautiful... you're poems of love and hope always know how to touch my heart. 5/5 beautiful work

Wonderful poem. Your a really good writer.
5/5

~Chelsea

This is a beautifully penned piece. It was a wonderful read. I could find only one thing wrong with it. the bit "Yet this is one side love" should be Yet this is one sided love. Other then that it was a great poem. 5/5

Kalee

These words are the most affecting things to say to a girl...If it's real,just hand this poem out her...and i bet she will beg you to be together
I think there is no need to say good job...cos you do it everytime good
Take care
Laura