Really Gone

by Curry   Apr 6, 2007


Laying here in my bed,
Staring at my ceiling.
So many thoughts running through my head,
I'm thinking, when will my broken heart start healing?
I know it's been forever since you've been gone,
But I still waste my days thinking of you.
I cant figure out what I did wrong,
What did I ever do?
What did I do to make you break my heart,
What made you want to see me cry?
What made "us" fall apart,
Why did you do this,
Baby,why?
No matter how much I try,
I cant forget you.
No matter how much I wonder why,
I wont ever have a clue.
Because you don't care about all this pain you're putting me through,
You don't care that I still love you.
It's getting harder and harder to stay strong,
But I guess I have to accept the fact that you're really gone.

written by: curry on 3.26.07

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  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow.
    That was a very emotional & sad poem to read. =[
    The flow was good, the word usage was fantastic, and the emotions were clear & strong.

    "Laying here in my bed,
    Staring at my ceiling.
    So many thoughts running through my head,
    I'm thinking, when will my broken heart start healing?"

    ^ My favorite lines & a wonderful way to open up the poem. Wonderful job, keep it up! =]
    5/5

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    I thought the flow was fine, it all depends on how you read it..

    "Laying here in my bed,
    Staring at my ceiling.
    So many thoughts running through my head,
    I'm thinking, when will my broken heart start healing?"

    The opening four lines is something that i think every girl has done, i know i have =)
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Nikki

    Good!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Like I said earlier the flow was a bit off but just count the syllabols and try to make the lines match up it will have a better rhythm as well

  • 17 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    I found this poem was a bit hard to read. It didn't flow very well, in my opinion. If you tried breaking it up into stanzas and using a more steady meter it would improve the pome quite a bit. I did like the last two lines of the poem, kind of reminded me of a Shakespearean sonnet, with a rhyming couplet at the end.

    --Steph

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