by skynerraw Apr 8, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
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Its midnight bliss |
by Melpomene
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Ok, The flows off in this poem mainly because some of your lines are shorter and some are longer making the syllable count off. If you made the lines have a similar amount of syllables throughout it then it would flow more evenly. Hope that helps you a little bit. Well done though~mel |