This is a really good poem i like the way again you use mataphors and similies to show things in more detail thumbs up :D

xxx alex xxx

I already commented and read this one. But I read it again. I liked it even better the second time around.

You chose great words
and a great concept
but the flow wasnt there
and something else was missing

The flow is way off. Other then that it is a great poem. It just needs a little work:)

Wonderful word choices...the flow is a little difficult to find because there isnt much of a format.. but once i found the flow it was an enjoyable read.. :D nice job

Indeed your right lol your poems are different so keep it up!! different is good...although so are stanzas and a wee bit of structure but meh no biggie. good write

I like this piece, somewhat abstract and philosophical... I love that it gives off the essence of deeper meanings too. Great choice of words...

It didn't keep me as interested as the others, but it's not bad.

I love the lines:
the yellow marker in my pocket never tiers of leaving you messages in places you'll never see.

Beautiful. I love the words/sentences you come up with to describe things. Very unique, which is excellent.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

This is really beautiful. The part about the ants was super. Amazing. But I wonder who this is about. Who are you meeting in dreams? And is it the dreams you forget, or the person? You were right. This does make me wonder.

I love the style and the language you use in this piece, some fantastic images and the ending is perfect. Truly a great and powerful poem.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Gary Jurechka

Excellent write!..the choice of words was superb but i would have been better if it was divided in to stanzas..the flow was a tad off....but the poem was different like all your other works..This one was also great...though i had to read twice to comprehend...but i loved the sense of difference and it was a wll written unique peice!
Good job!5/5

xxPoojaxx

I see why you call it checkmate. you think you've won (or you really have). I think that your style is perfect. I really liked this one. Hopefully the rest will be as perfect! Great flow and theme and love the title thing. 5/5