Really great poem keep up the good work

This is really good i love it hun

I love this poem. its real short but to the point. great job writing it!

The flow of your poem was very good, and the rhyming for the most part seemed pretty unforced, although a bit cliche in your rhyme choices. This is a topic that a lot can relate to, but it is also done alot. Try broadening the subject with more discriptive words... Don't base your poem around having it rhyme, just write down what you feel and then you can start twisting words around to rhyme. Remember, you want to have your poem stand out as somthing different from all the rest of the iceblock, so chip yourself off the block and explore new areas of creativity to discribe such a beautiful subject. Over all nice job, the flow was perfect, and had excelent rhythem.

I liked the flow of this poem it really did flow nicely throughout it. Some of your word use seemed a little too commen expecially with the ryhming part. I think if you described things into a little more detail then it would make this poem much better. The ryhming was good though. Other then them few things i liked this poem i found it well written. Good work~mel

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I liked the repetition at the beginning of every stanza, it really got the point across of how much you need him
The rhyming was fine, it helped along the flow of the poem.
Nicely done =)
5/5
*Gem*

This is beautifully written...and I wasn't expecting that ending...I thought it had great impact and was a twist.
The flow was good throughout and I enjoyed the repetition, I thought it helped make your point well.

So sweet and cute..and the ending just shocked me..so powerful words and wording
Keep it up
Laura

I loved this one, especially because it reminded me a lot of my own work, its beautiful and breath taking

amazing job

brittany (MD)

I really liked how you talked about the person's point of view and talked about two sides at the end.. and the rhymes are really great good job.. 5/5

Aweh it was cute, but it was also sort of cliched with some lines..basically what I'm saying is that some of those lines are often written in a lot of love poems. But, you got your emotions through and kept to the point. Keep it up. ^_^

AWwwwww. That's so sweet, but so sad.
I couldn't find not on thing wrong.
Flawless as can be.
Well done!
God Bless 5/5
<3Tayyy

I liked it! And I could definitly relate to it which was even so much better! I just loved this poem!