Erotic Allure

You described everything quite nicely in the poem, and used some great adjectives. The flow was a it off at the very end, but it's tied together quite nicely, so itdoesn't matter. :)

Hot passion that is.
tis an adoration in a mixed up twisted way.
ha ecstasy it is, the greatest ecstacy of them all. 5/5 love.

Hey,
First of all im really osrry for the late comment, i was really busy and when i acctually sat and read the poem i couldnt leave a comment as i had to go. Anyways about the poem, i kinda think this shoulkd be in the explicit section rather then love.. Anyways your word usage has excellent discription and creates clear imagery. To improve the poem i thought you should of used better punctuation and enjambment in some places. Other then that a great peom! Keep writing! xx

Awesome that is amazing such passion
great job

brittany(MD)

Ooh, I really liked this, very errotic. Maybe you should put it into the explicit seciton though. I loved the descriptions and imagery in this, you painted a very detailed picture. I also liked how it was very simple but full of meaning. The flow was good and it had a nice feel to it. Nicely done. 5/5