Hey,
nice poem, just like a little story i really enjoyed it, but i dont think its a explicit poem..

kisses stephanie

Unique and creative! 5/5

Not exactly great but catchy. The words could be a little better but I do like the story and just the overall rhyme because of that catchy beat. In a way I kinda think that it needs some nicer wording. Otherwise, though not the best, it is cool. Nice imagery and a good flow.
~Faith-less

Fascinating! I absolutely love reading about vampires (I'm a huge Anne Rice fan). This was a really interesting poem! Keep up the good work, 5/5

I found this poem to be really interesting to read about a vampires kiss. The imagery was great really loved that. I think if u used different words though it would make this poem sound a bit better. But other then that this is a great poem that i really did enjoy. Well done~mel

Returning the favor!

Wow, It really brought the memory back of when I was reading Dracula by Bram Stoker. Definatley good, and definatley a thriller. Expecially when you read it in the dark.(Like I am now) Loved the poem!

~Autumn

Scary little poem if you believe in Vampires.Great imagery and very creative.5/5 Peace and Blessings

This is awesome i like vampires lol but ya awesome poem the beginning was abit hard to get into but once you do it was awesome so good job and thx for the comment:)

keenan

Hey cute poem, lol a bite weird but very creative! i loved your idea---tara

It was an interesting poem it has a great meaning

Honestly, they will catch you.
but anyway i really like that poem. great job!!

Interesting poem and well penned. I enjoyed it thoroughly. 5/5. I look forward to reading more of your peoms.

A good write keep up the good work

Lovely little dark poem, it really has a great rhythm without tripping over itself
5/5
*Gem*

(P.S. Sugar and Spice was 'supposed' to be childish.. hence being under the humour catagory.. O_o)

Oh well done. i loved the topic you talked bout. it was so unique.

5/5 David

Is this the poem u wrote for my erotic contest if so u need to post it in the contest cause I am wanting to do judgeing soon on that contest. good poem

Good poem yep 2nd place in erotic contest

The imagery in this poem is good and very vivid, and the story behind it is very interesting. My favorite stanza is:
-Her body shivers and her eyes seize
But then he wipes his lips
And now she definitely knows
She has to give him a kiss-
The flow is a little off in some parts, but that doesn't ruin the whole impression very much.