Great theme and storyline. However it sounds (well reads) like you were trying to hard to stick to the rhyme scheme and to shove details in that the overall poem was a bit mushy.

{4/5}

[PygmyPuff]

Ohh wow this was a great poem. i love poems about things that actually happen in life.great job writing it! 5/5

*5/5 EXCELLENT! [[i think a lot of your poems are excellent.. lol]] but i looooved the story behind it. I also liked how it was sorta told on the "doers" side of it instead of the "victems." I love your rhymes and how you can really pull a poem together. excellent job!

-Lith

Great poem. I truely enjoyed reading it. It rhymed wonderfully. the structure of your poem was good too. I really liked the way you made each line the same size as the other. your a very good writter. 5/5 keep up the good work.

I liked this poem although i did find it hard to understand what was going on in this poem from the started but slowly i started to realise what had happened and what was going on. The ryhme was really beautiful and it flowed great throughout the whole poem. Good job on this poem through it expressed great emotion. Well done 5/5

I really enjoyed this poem! I think you did an amazing job with the whole story line and everything. It seemed to flow right. I liked the rythm everything was really good!

I really liked this because it wasnt just a random poem, it was a story...which gives it a deeper meaning through my perspective. Nicely written!

This is an awesome poem, i hope you keep it up because you are really good.

The friendship went on that felt like forever,

Did you mean "what" instead of "that" ?

& You did a great job with this . It`s about something that happens often, but the poem gave off a calm feeling . Angry, but still calm, and I find that really hard to do . A couple of the lines I didn`t like, but they flowed well .
..__MiNDYY

Well written. the ending was surprising. great job :)

Wow, well written, the flow was great, and I cannot relate but I felt it...:D Loved it! It was an awesome poem! And a great use of words!
5/5

Amazing, superb poem, all I can do is stand in awe, this is truly incredible, keep p the fantastic work. Check out some of my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

YOU HAVE DONE A GREAT JOB.
NICELY WRITTEN WITH PERFECT RHYMING.

BEAUTIFUL.

Great poem! 5/5 it had a great flow and it rhymed well, great job hun!
xx love

Excellent write. The emotion and concept work hand-in-hand to create a very sad, yet easy-to-relate poem. The flow was flawless, and the concept was brilliant. Not to mention a word usage rarely seen. :) 5/5