A gift bestowed under the clear blue skies [Terzanelle]

by Debbie   Apr 16, 2007


I see my fated stars within his eyes,
as his orbs melt me as the sun does to snow-
a gift bestowed under the clear blue skies.

He reveals, it seems, in an earnest glow,
making my young heart skip a thousand beats,
as his orbs melt me as the sun does to snow.

Those mystic pools fail to reflect deceit.
He held me captive in his earnest glance,
making my young heart skip a thousand beats.

Like an arrow through the heart, I'm entranced.
With such depth and passion blazing no guiles,
he held me captive in his earnest glance.

What magic lies on his gaze with no vile?
Oh, how can such eyes bring to my soul mirth
with such depth and passion blazing no guiles?

It is the time for my heart's love rebirth.
I see my fated stars within his eyes!
Oh, how can such eyes bring to my soul mirth?
...A gift bestowed under the clear blue skies.

© 2006 by Debbie de Lara

A terzanelle is a poetry form which is a combination of the villanelle and the terza rima. It is nineteen lines total, with five triplets and a concluding quatrain.

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  • 16 years ago

    by On Cupids Bad Side

    Very good, I enjoyed this wonderful piece. Very well done :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr M

    Very good...I have such a problem writing in this form but you have it down perfectly. Great job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    WOW that was and excellent poem ,wording was great I loved it m great job , it's all new to me but man it was good , thanks for sharing , your friend Tracy d 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wonderful piece, greatly written. It holds so much beauty within the lines.
    My favorite stanza is:
    -Those mystic pools fail to reflect deceit-
    He held me captive in his earnest glance,
    Making my young heart skip a thousand beats.-

    Great job, keep up! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    This poem is certainly unique and very few could have written it this well I'm sure. I have a hard time attempting to write these poems because I know if one line is off, the whole poem is as well. But you were perfect in everyway and I love the way you make even the hardest of formats look so easy. Amazing job as always 5/5 GG23