Comments : Melanie

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I really liked this poem the lines were short but effective and it showed how much your friendship means to you. A beautifully penned poem to someone im sure means alot to you. Well done~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Beautiful smile,
    makes me have one to.
    Because you smile,
    I smile with you.

    I liked that stanza a lot (: It`s true for [almost] everyone . The lines were short, but pretty effective . It was a cute poem, but kind of gave off a message as looks are all that matter . But I get the poem and the friendship within it .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    I like this poem and all. but it seems kinda over rated. like your trying to explain a guy but then it turns out being your best friend, doesnt really make much sense to me. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    AWww, that is cute!
    Short, sweet, and cute!
    My favorite kind!
    Keep it up!
    God Bless 5/5
    <3tayyy

  • 16 years ago

    by Sydney

    Awh i loved it! Loved the discriptions and all. Ha, i first thought it was about a more then a friend but it seems its not. Its way good besides my bad judgment
    (^_^)
    ~Sid~

  • 16 years ago

    by Sydney

    Ohhhh wow im so slow. that would explain the title *feeling way stupid** hehe my fault

  • 16 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    Maybe i should pay her a late night visit. just kidding. great poem kaila

    your servant:
    david

  • 16 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow great poem! it's really nice of you to write a poem for a friend! i'm sure she liked it. it's really good. 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 16 years ago

    by skynerraw

    :D Your friend is lucky to have you writing this for them:D This is a great poem!

    "Sparkling eyes,
    stare at me deep.
    Like they're reading me,
    and my secrets to keep."

    I have to agree that a first it sounds like it's about a guy, but either way it's a great poem:D

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Writing with short lines is, perhaps, your distinct style of writing. I'm giving you some of my props to that. As on the whole, I think it's quite a sweet poem. Its descriptions fit perfectly to my bestfriend's; it reminded me of her.. and that is why I like this.
    Thanks for sharing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lonesomeme

    Ok, so this poem is really good. I like the imagery and deliverance of it. It isn't so much descriptive as it is what you say that makes the reader able to picture it. Marvelous! 5/5 -unattractive1

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Sweet. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Austin

    Haha nice poem Kaila...i got make a poem about my best friend sooner or later but im to lazy >_>
    Another great read...loving it. 17 more poems to comment from you.

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Ha, awww that's so adorable!
    Such a cute poem to write for
    your frined. I hope she liked it.
    Ah wonderful! 3/6 God Bless 5/5
    <3tay(^__^)

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Aww... that was so sweet.
    Your imagery was vivid & the flow was flawless throughout the poem. I can tell that you care dearly for your friend. :] Such a cute dedication. 5.5 Keep writing!

    "Beautiful smile,
    makes me have one to.
    Because you smile,
    I smile with you."

    ^ My favorite stanza. Wonderful job!

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    "Beautiful smile,
    makes me have one to.
    Because you smile,
    I smile with you."
    this I would have to say is my favorite stanza. The flow was flawless. The emtion was strong
    and the imergery was vividly real. Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Don't use slang within poetry unless it is a slang poem or song, therefore use "them" instead of "em" Other than that this was a wonderfully written poem that came right from the heart. Great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Aww.. this is sweet.. i love your style.. all of your poems so far are so simple but still you get all your messages across strong.. this poem was no different.. my only suggestion is that i think you could've spent more time describing the fun moments you've had or how much your friendship means to you rather than how your friend looks :D

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Superb write about friendship. I am always there for good friends. Well penned.