Comments : A Thousand Paper Cranes

  • 15 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Oh, so sad
    but written so greatly
    you are a great writer, keep it up
    another 5/5 from me

  • 15 years ago

    by Amie

    Your poem makes me feel peaceful, and you have written it very well. :) I to enjoy writing free verse.

  • 15 years ago

    by Marjan

    I liked the way you had written:
    Snuffed out, like the life of a dandelion

    and this speaks more than it seems at first:
    I wonder: how fervent is the hand,
    that erases his own writing?

    a deep piece of writing, just the way I like them. thanks! :)
    Marjan

  • 15 years ago

    by stefanie

    You have a way of taking your thoughts and putting them on paper that makes your writing so deep. i like it. great poem. sad, but still great. nicely done...

  • 15 years ago

    by stefanie

    You have a way of taking your thoughts and putting them on paper that makes your writing so deep. i like it. great poem. sad, but still great. nicely done...

  • 15 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    5/5 what an interesting write. your style in the poem is very unique and the words you use are flawless. excellent job. =]

  • 15 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Nice poem! you used a lot of good words in this poem! good job!

  • 15 years ago

    by Atomic

    "Meet me under the power lines,
    In the pewter sky of November."

    I don't think the first two lines are as strong as it could have been, but it's still a good start.

    "Snuffed out, like the life of a dandelion."

    I can understand why Marjan liked it so much, but it is not what impressed me the most about your poem.

    "Though they are... [Still like statues]
    Can they hear me?"

    The last part pulled it together.

    "I wonder: how fervent is the hand,
    that erases his own writing?"

    I read this part over three times, and each time it just gets better. -This- is what impressed me the most.

    You ended it perfectly.

    Though I may not be the best writer, I still know what I like.

    Bravo.

    5/5

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 15 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    I love the similies used in this like (the life of a dandelion) and (still like statues). The poem promotes the iea of sorrow and pasion into something. Your work is really well expressed :D

    xxx alex xxx

  • 15 years ago

    by Marcus

    Now I liked this
    it was a deep and meaningful poem

  • 15 years ago

    by isabel

    This is a very deep and unique poem, full of meaning and it flows naturally, though in free verse...
    keep on writing...

    *isabel*

  • 15 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Nice one it is different and makes you think a little. I liked it:)

  • 15 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. great job.. i like this poem a lot.. i love how it can be interpreted in many metaphorical ways with a much deeper meaning

  • 15 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I read this poem three times.
    First time, I had no idea what you were
    Talking about.
    Second time, still no idea.
    Third time, a little bit.
    But what does this have to do with
    Paper Cranes.
    I'm thinking about ghost.
    You're talking to someone
    About meeting them
    To see ghosts.
    That's all I got.
    Sorry.
    It's pretty cool.
    Just confusing.
    I'll give you a 4/5 :]

  • 15 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Deeply amazing.The word choice was brillant, the emtions were strong. This is truly an imprssive peice of work. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I loved this peice each line made me feel something completely different that then last one. Wonderful job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Black Princess

    Wow loved this!! So sad wow i dont know what to say so much emotion is such a short piece. Well done 6/5 even tho thats not possible but it was really good :)

  • 15 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I'm not sure why the title is what it is, yet I do.
    This is a really weird poem...but, yet, it's so wonderful. It's not quite an "Oh, wow" poem, but it's up there. [And for me to say that about a non-rhyming poem; be proud.]
    Nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Little Dreamer

    I really really love your style. The way you write really makes me have to sit and process the poem to really get it. That, I believe is what poetry should be like. It should cause you to take the time to take it all in. Very good metaphors on this one and great vocab you have there. Keep it up, you definitely have talent.