Christian Sinner 2 continued

by Broken Inside He only wants to hurt me   Apr 22, 2007


I cry both inside, and out
My only love lost
In the bitter cold

For i am a sinner
A Christian sinner

My mother now lost
She knows of my terrible sins
The one for greed and lust

She forgives me
But she keeps close watch

For she knows not what became of the man
His death never reported
But haunts me to this day

Still i sin
Still i continue to lust

But only this time
I know the consequences
I know what will become of me

My mother left only my father around, he knows not what to do
And i am left to fend on my own in this cold, cruel, world
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I decided to continue Christian sinner part one so check it out for the whole story.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Hm the ending of this poem kind of confuses me and I dont think that it really fits properly. The only think other than that, that I think needs some work is to make sure that all of the I's are capitalized. But I liked the general message of this peice.

  • 16 years ago

    by Yuna

    I guess I can understand now. A sin can leave you with guilt and weight on your shoulders. A tough life. I liked how you continued the story from the first one, and that you kept the same overall appearance. This poem made a lot of sense and the ending made me think. I wonder if this was your plan? Great Job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Painted By Colors llInLovell

    Talented, I am looking forward to reading more of your writing!
    5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I REALLY hope this isn't true.. I would seriously disrespect you. =//

    Anyways.
    The first one [as it always seems to be the case] was better, but this wasn't too bad. The flow was a little off, though, espically the ending line.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Very good once again
    I loved the simplicity
    It was a wonderful poem
    Great work once again!

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