Coooooooooooooool. It began like a fairytale but smacked you into reality furher on i feel that this is good for whilst you were in business class lol i only writ poetry when im alone bcoz i can feel wat i mean more if that makes sence. Some of the words used are really good to explain what it is about like emerald island and priceless smile. good job xxx alex xxx

'She saw me staring at her lovely eyes'

That sentence is kinda weird. Wouldn't it make more since to say 'She noticed me taking in her lovely eyes?' or 'I couldn't help but stare into her eyes?' It's just weird that you say you stare at her eyes rather than in them.

'She had rapture her soft arms around me'

should be 'wrapped her' rather than 'rapture her'

Your poem was really sad and beautful. You had a few mistakes but nothing that isn't fixable. 4/5

Its not bad at all.. i noticed a couple spelling errors but other then that it was wonderful.. better then i could do..

You did make a few mistakes just in like spelling and grammer stuff, but for writing in business class...omg this is beautiful. your poems are so wonderfully penned they just touch the heart, 5/5
gabriella

I noticed a couple of spelling n grammar errors...besides tht.The poem was superb!...n lol writing such beautiful stuff during class is like Kooolll.......Luv it anyways...just cool....
Kp up de good wrk..
Tk care.God bless
xxPoojaxx

Excellent poem thanks for your comment on "My soul mate"

Rapture should be wrapped. other than that I can see nothing to improve. You did an excellent job,. the poem was beautifully written, and so sad. the emtions were raw and strong, the imagery was vivid, and the word choice was excellnt. 5/5

Ok this reminds me of the poem "Island Man" by Grace Nichols. And for this reason i didnt like it. I dont know.. when i read the begining of the poem i remembered the word "emerald" being used to describe an island. This stuck out at me, and i didnt know where i could remember it form. But then the words "heaves himself" reminded me of the poem. I know you havnt fully copyed the poem but still... Using some phrases does seem like you got it from the poem. And also the word "Groggily.. Groggily..". Again this is used in this exact poem! This oculd be a good poem but dont copy phrases form other poerms... it just doesnt work...

Hahaha yeah! I got the idea from the 'Island man' and uhm some lines are from that poem :P