Comments : The Swing

  • I really enjoyed this poem. It was kinda long, but it kept me interested throughout it all, so long was fine. The flow was wonderful and message was outstanding, keep up the good work. =)
    -Ally

  • 16 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Oh wow that was an amazing poem!! I loved it and it really drew me in. Excellent piece you have here, very well written and great rhythmn and flow. Keep it up! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Run out of words

    Well first of even though this poem is long like Shadow stalker said 'It's their loss". Because I think every moment I spent reading it was worth it. I loved the poem, I loved the feeling, I loved the sadness portrayed when you loose someone you love, and most of all I love its innocence and it shows the harsh reality of life. I don't know, but this poem somehow really touched me. I really really like it. 5/5 wouldn't do it justice, but this website won't let me vote more than once...so gosh! :(

  • 16 years ago

    by Molly Elizabeth

    Wow... I love this poem... you could just picture the swing... and everything that was happening... beautifully written, very very sad... it's a wonderful yet heartbreaking poem... I love these lines:

    Somehow I must forgive that person
    Because perhaps he was never taught,
    That when you drink, then decide to drive
    Someone's life is put on the spot

    I love it because it shows such compassion to forgive someone for that kind of pain. The whole poem was simply AMAZING. Keep writing :-)

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    That was long but simply amazing! it kept my attention from start to end! The flow was flawless, I like the imagery you have created in this beautiful poem. I really like the tragic ending :) it shows how much the girl love the guy. Excellent poem.

    I really love this stanza..
    It was our senior year,
    As I sat upon the Swing
    You bent down onto your knees
    And gave to me a ring

    A perfect 5/5! keep up the good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by X Kashies Misery X

    That was really beautiful, it was so well writeen and the fact that it told such a powerful story it was simply touching. I was really into it to. Good work, really

  • 16 years ago

    by Claudd

    Wow that was great 5/5

    it had my eyes like glued to the computer

    keep it up

    much luv
    claudzx3