Comments : Caleb Scott(Acrostic)

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Beyond the world he's more than a thousand words. = Beyond the world he's more than JUST a thousand words. (helps the flow... syllabication)

    brake = break

    wold is = world is

    This acrostic flowed beautifully, surprising for a poem that is restricted so much. I'm so happy that you are in love with someone.

    The only errors I found are above, and other than that this poem is a beautiful and heartfelt poem.

    Great job, m'dear.
    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    It shows how much you care and also it shows he cares for you alot too as this poem is a prove of how you can write that great to him.
    great job and well done.
    i wish someone would write me something like this, i would be so happy about it so im sure now he s so happy about this poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem really. I think that it shows just how much you care about him. I really loved this poem and I can defiantly relate to it. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    THis poem was really beautifully written, i found it to be quite sweet and enjoyable to read, showing much love flowing throughout it. It shows how much you care for your bf because you actually wrote this so well with strong beautiful emotion. Well done on a perfectly penned acrostic poem.~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    That was a very sweet poem, and I'm sure your boyfriend would love it.

    There was a few lines that seemed off, but I'm sure you would like to keep it the way it is, and it's fine, nothing too big.

  • 17 years ago

    by Synh

    Very sweet poem. Not many people write happy love poems anymore so it's nice to see one every once in a while. I also like that you wrote it about someone you know rather than making up something just to make it sound beautiful.

    Awesome write! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Wow.
    This poem gave me the chillies.
    Lol.
    I love the third line.
    You could reword the second line to make it better, though.
    All in all.
    I give it a 5 :]

  • 17 years ago

    by honeypot

    I loved this poem! I could connect with everything that you wrote, and I love the fact that you trust him with your heart and know that he will look after it :-) It's too easy for poems like this to get bitter.
    Well done a great read!

    x

  • 17 years ago

    by Faded

    Very well written. i liked it, i think the second stanza standed out more than the first but both still very good. gj

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Hey,
    An excellent acrostic. I dont read many love poems but i have to admit they have alot of feeling in them. It was a really emotive poem. The description youve used was quite powerful, it was quite a swee poem. Its good you havnt used his ful name, this is the internet after all lol. ANywyas the poem was really meotional, you described him as what people dream of... I liked your alliteration; "Skin soft as silk" on the secound stanza, it worked greatly. The conclusion was sweet and it concluded the poem subject excellently. To improve i suggest you use a more variety of punctuation. Otehr then that a good read. Keep writing. xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    Very nicely written and heartfelt.
    I could feel your love for him just through the way you described it.
    Wonderfully done, 5/5.

  • So much love and promise in this poem.
    The emotion was shown and the flow was excellent.

    'Skin soft as silk touches every inch of me that shakes.
    Compassion burns in his heart that he loves me with.'

    Beautiful 5/5

    [Sarah]

  • 17 years ago

    by XxMoonLightxX

    Very very excelent...i loved it...
    This was a great poem to write about him...you must really love him alot...

    he is lucky to have a girl like you...
    you are lucky to have him...there aren't many more guys like him around.

    well anyway

    nice job!
    5/5 from me
    love always!
    ~shannon~

  • 17 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    Awe!! i think its so cute how you used your boyfriends name to make the poem its soo creative. the words you used made the poem that much more intreaging. great job.

    PM?

  • 17 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    Hi,
    I really like these types of poems. i have been intrested in them for awhile. anyway. Great Job.. And i think its cute how you used your boyfriends name.. anywho.. great job and keep up the great work.. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is sweet i like the way you are so happy with writing this poem because of thel ove who you wrote for it for.

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    This is adorable.
    Love is such a wonderful thing.
    I love this poem it was so cute!!
    Well done I liked the last stanza
    it was amazing
    nice job

  • 17 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    I think its sweet that you used your boyfriends name in a poem, the poem is full of emotion, when i read it i could sence that you really love him. the flow was good and i enjoyed reading it.

    also i think that not many people write a acrostic poem that good as this one 5/5
    kisses stephanie

  • 17 years ago

    by omgitsmina

    Wonderfully written. My only suggestion would be to use stronger vocabulary and diction. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    I really liked this one.. I could feel all of your happiness. Its wonderful when you find someone who makes you feel that way. I liked the word choices, and there is nothing that I can critique on.. srry. Nice job