Very impressive. I really liked this poem.
The flow went beautiful, and the rhyming
didn't seemed forced at all. I couldn't find
any mistakes at all. God bless 5/5
<3Tay^__^ily

I really like this
Interesting story
nice flo
and everything fits just right

Great poem. Very nice:) 5/5

Very nicely written when I read this poem for some reason the first thing that came to mind was Harry Potter lol wierd I know...but you still did an amazing job!

"Yet if it is the battle that you win
And you tear the walls apart
You will win the glorious prize
And conquer the childlike heart"
^ I love this stanza. :D

I think you did a great job, with this poem. I loved how it was story like, actually. Usually I don't, but it worked out with this poem.. Because the flow was good, and the rhyming was quite great.

5/5.
<3

Thanks for the comment,
and it was a poem about a lava lamp that broke, Lol.

Very cool indeed! I like how you're talking about the chess game thing. Very interesting. This poem could mean lots of things.

5/5

~Alex~

It had mystery in it, it made me think and guess. it wasnt just words put together, there were 'medaphors' and i liked that. 5/5

Another great poem by you, you have proved your great talent once again,
this was greatly written yet full of emotions and sadness.
keep it up
a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

Very nice job and I enjoy reading poems that sound like a story. Quite a few of mine do. This poem gave me a vivid image of what was going underway and being felt. Keep writing. 5/5
cheers, josh

Great imagery and description throughout this fluent poem. what i liked about it was how it was story like but still flowed like a poem, it seemed to end with a sense of resolve and hope which made the poem all the more effective, loved it. xx

Beautifully expressed,i relly like this, 5/5 hun. i love the part that says:

A heart so soft and loving
Locked up in walls and chains
Into the empty halls you will find
Whatever else the heart remains

love it!! keep up the good work!!!

x

Ohhh my... I adore this!
I was completely hooked by the end of the opening stanza, and whilst I didn't want this to end, I wasn't disappointed when it did, as you ended it so perfectly.
The flow is flawless throughout, and the imagery created vivid pictures for me.
The wording was a treat to read, as was the whole poem.
You did a truly wonderful job with this.

Very good.. the flow was great.. 5/5 keep up the awsome work!

Well done, the flow and meaning of this poem was great!
Iliked it that it told a story, an it was noble and thought provoking.
Great work! x

I think you did really well i didnt understand certain things but it was stilll good 5/5
tiffany

A very perculiar poem..i havnt heard one quite like that before...none the less wonderful read and i loved it...5/5

Wow... very nice choice of words the flow was great as well as the way you made a story like vibe out of your emotions, a nice touch .. good job:D

Great read! 5/5 keep it up! i like the style and flow in this. bravo

I really admire girl ur worlk1 its really have a great flow and it was amazing coz u have a great imagination at ur age.. keep it up5/5

Wow that is great! good flow and good word usage. a lot of meaning and emotion in this poem. keep up the great writing!